“She didn't know what she was getting myself into. Years later she silently thanked him for forcing her to postpone such a decision until she was older enough to think for herself.” (Wakatsuki 104)
There seems to be a problem with this quote. Check the text again. "Myself" doesn't fit, and if it is a quote from the text, it should have the proper agreement. ("Myself" would be "herself.") On the other hand, if you're taking her first person narration and incorporating it into your essay as you write about her and what she wrote in the third person, then you need to make a small change to the quote. You will need to use what are called "square brackets" when you alter a quote to fit into your paper. Don't use parentheses for this; be sure to use square brackets.
I don't have the text in front of me, but I'm guessing the actual quote from the book is "I didn't know what I was getting myself into." If that's the case, when you re-work the quote to fit your paper, here's how to properly alter the text using square brackets:
"[She] didn't know what [she] was getting [herself] into." The square brackets are permissible when they don't really change the meaning of a quote or if they are used around explanatory material. Let's say that Wakatsuki referred to the internment camp in this sentence: "We found it to be intolerable in some ways but tolerable in others." You could use square brackets as follows in your paper:
Wakatsuki spoke of both the good and the bad, writing "We found it [the internment camp] to be intolerable in some ways but tolerable in others" (122). <I made up the quote and the page number.> Three things to notice about this sentence:
(1) use of square brackets to enclose explanatory material; (2) incorporating the author's name into the exposition means you don't have to repeat it in the parenthetical citation--all you need to do is to cite the page number; (3) placing a period at the end of the citation, outside of the parenthesis. I noticed that in your paper, you did not include the ending punctuation after your citations. Example: you wrote "...a very successful man” (Wakatsuki 56) But he was..." You should insert a period after the parenthesis after the page number. It would be (Wakatsuki 56). <--- period here
Be sure to proofread your writing carefully. You wrote "...until she was older enough to think for herself." I think you meant "old enough." Also, move the period after herself and put it after the citation: ... for herself" (Wakatsuki 104). <-- put the period here
You also have a run-on sentence here: Jeanne believes that her father's decision not to let her be baptized was unfair, at the same time papa's decision was right because it enabled her to maintain some of her original identity. You need to replace the comma after "unfair" with a period and capitalize "at" to start the next sentence. This kind of run-on sentence is called a "comma splice."
he would not let those deputies push him out the door. He led them.'' <--citation here
in the absence of a chief, worried about what should be done.'' <-- citation here
Be sure to cite all the rest of the quotes from the book as well.
Finally... and most importantly... you have represented someone else's writing as your own writing in at least one part of your paper. When you take another person's words or ideas and present them in your paper without citing that information (or without using quotes when the material is taken directly from someone else's writing, it is called plagiarism, which you already know about. Go back through your paper, and if there are parts where you copied and pasted or paraphrased information you found elsewhere, be sure to cite that information. If *I* were your teacher, I would hand this paper back to you and ask you to re-submit it with proper citations. If you were to tell me, "What citations? I cited everything I was supposed to and didn't copy anything from someone else," I would not give you a passing grade. I would tell you, "You had your chance but didn't make the necessary corrections."
Benjamin Watson, in "Making Sure My Kids Know a Father's Love." Sound familiar? It should. Here's what he wrote as part of his article:
"There are so many things a father's love gives and so many things that a lack of it destroys. I believe that God gives us the greatest example of a father's love. His love is sacrificial, patient, kind, humble, honest, forgiving, faithful, and selfless. It is constant and unchanging."
Sound familiar now? Cite it or delete it (and any other sections of your paper where you did the same thing.)
Best wishes with your re-write.